In the art gallery of a college exhibit the concrete floors mean easy clean up and the white walls suggest spots to display the art in front. The art there on display does not show one particular type of art rather a tiny sampling of different areas of art. Some paintings could go behind a sofa; others are too large and strange to be seen in other place but an art exhibit. Two such pieces correlate since they are both objects of use.
First the object of use is the lute. A common string instrument in the 16th century played exactly as a guitar. The lute has three basic parts: body, neck and head. The body shape is an egg cut in half from tiny end to round bottom it is made of wood. Moving around the trim of the body its clear the lute has been well taken care of since it is over 400 years old. Nothing to fancy on the backside of the body just maple cut a long time ago. The circle on the front is a tiny craving of vines that twist, swirl, curl, and tangle together. A true artist must have cut that circle since in the middle is a tiny star rest directly in the middle no side is off-skew. Moving up along the strings the neck is made up of spruce. The neck is made up ebony with all the strings hold firm on the neck. All together the lute has warm and dark woods to make it up.
Next is the newspaper. A three foot blob of newspaper cuts. The cuts are two inches long with diamond shape to them. Somehow this object was rolled around in a barrel and tossed onto the cold concrete floor. When examined the cuts are moving in direction of counter-clockwise with the top cuts lying submissive to the looker. Some of the cuts are colored with others just some snip-it of text. Mostly the newspaper wasn’t any special with a few cuts floating around the base and far away.
The barrel of fluffy newspaper is to raise awareness about recycling, plain and simple. The lute has significance as a testimony to Kans Frel, the craftsman. Newspaper hardly ever gets recycled unless thrown away by some who has taken the steps to actually be a good recycler of wasteful materials and recycles the paper. No one would want to throw away or for any matter recycle the lute. As such as an ancient instrument the lute could be worth something. Lutes had special craftsman to build and shape it. A synopsis is pasted on the wall next to the lute that tells of the time, materials, strings, and man who created the particular one on display. The newspaper has no description with only a basic title, “newspaper.”
With looking at both they are night wild and crazy but are fun to stare at. Newspaper cuts are sprinkled about the floor with the lute resting on a stand not ten paces off in the distance. Both can be eye pleasing. The lights are not to dime inside the exhibit. The setup is simple with one wall dividing the square room. Anybody can walk in and see the exhibit in a minute but it can be stared at. The objects are curiously mysterious and some of the paintings are large with warp scenes. I found the exhibit interesting, but the newspaper and lute is what I found to be extremely comparable. The two are trash and treasure. The newspaper will be recycled and the lute stored in a velvet box somewhere. Both are fun to stare at.
All together the exhibit is cool with the learning of some ancient instrument, neat paintings, and random works of art on the floors. Much of the exhibit is easy to take in but rather sudden. I would give the exhibit seven out of ten. The whole thing isn’t too bad and the exhibit is free, but if you take the time to come and stare it can be something to behold.
4 comments:
Leann Morris
You describe both art pieces very well. The details you include help the reader create a vivid picture of the two artworks. Also, I like the reference you made to Kans Frel. I found it very interesting. The part when you say the pieces are “trash and treasure” is a very nice comparison. It presents a solid idea. This idea, I feel, you could build on. You need to compare the lute and barrel of newspaper more. You touch on their location to each other, but is there another similarity? If there are not any other similarities, are there any differences? Extend on the compare and contrast content of the essay. Also, another thing you could do better is describe their effectiveness. You say the pieces are fun to look at, but how do the pieces make you feel. You definitely can elaborate more on effectiveness. There are many grammar errors. I would just go through the essay and add commas and fix typos. Two areas that you need to focus on are: the concluding part of your essay and comparing the two art works. The conclusion is not strong. You make a few good points, but it needs to flow better. You have a few sentences comparing the lute and barrel of newspaper, but add sentences and describe the connection between the pieces further, whether they are similar or different.
James, the overall essay is good. You did a very good job explaining what the two art pieces looked like. You gave every little detail of the lute and the newspaper piece. There is no question about what these two pieces look like. The reader can picture these objects in their minds because of the good descriptions. I like how you explained the significance of the lute. You did a great job contrasting the two pieces. The lute would never be recycled and definitely not be thrown away. I liked how you pointed that out. I thought the essay was organized well. Why is the newspaper piece about raising awareness of recycling? I don’t understand why that piece is supposes to raise recycling awareness. You need to give reasons that back up that statement. Throughout the paper I found lots of sentence fragments. Most of the sentences did not have subjects, and this made the essay hard to read. I would recommend closer proofreading to find these mistakes. When you analyze the pieces, you need to give more reasons to back up your statements. This will give the essay more credibility.
James, overall I thought that you described the two pieces of art very well. In your paper you did an excellent job on giving the reader a visual of both the dimensions and color of the lute. You also did a good job of explaining the look of the pile of the papers. I thought the essay was organized very well in that you kept everything flowing from one topic to the next. I think that you could also go back and better compare and contrast the two objects to point out a few more similarities or differences. You might also want to be certain about the fact that the newspaper is to raise recycling awareness and has no other meaning before you state that in a paper. In your revision you could further describe how not only where the objects fun to look at but what ideas or images where sparked in your mind while you were looking at them. Finally, you should go back and look over everything to make sure that you do not have any grammatical errors or sentence fragments.
You did a good job explaining the pictures in detail, I think you definitly conquered the goal of creativity and allowing the reader to see a picture of your peices in their mind. You also did a good job of organizing your paper. I thought it flowed nicely. I would recommend comparing and contrasting the two peices more. Also talk more about what other people thought of the newspaper peice and how strange we all thought it was. Read over your paper and check the grammar, I saw lots of mistakes. Also work on your intro paragraph, there needs to be more thought put into it.
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